Sometimes in the world things may not go right. There may be times when things may go the way you want it to. But also there is always times where things don't go the way you want it to. As people like to winning is everything. To me I believe that it isn't because it's how you respond from not your way.
On a early December morning we got the news of one of our own passing away. We couldn't believe how this could have happen. He was always such a happy and enjoyable person to be around. He would lighten up your day with a slight joke or the smile he would always has. But we had to go on with our baseball season and continue with only the memories of him. We would never see him again.
As the season would continue on the varsity would then dedicate the season to him. They went the season undefeated again into the OIA baseball playoffs. They knew that we were doing it for something bigger than us. All the hard work that we had endured was paying off. They knew that he was always there for us along the path. But this was where it counted.
The enjoyment of just being there on the side just watching the varsity being so close to being the OIA champions. Just one more out, with the crowd to it's feet and roaring for just one more out. "Pack" the ball was hit just to the shortstop and was fielded cleanly and was thrown to 1st base. The 1st baseman caught it and then ran in to the pitcher in celebration. The crowd roaring as the final out happened and clapped in approval. Just winning the championship was so amazing and dream setting that was finally accomplished.
But from there everything would then just turn south. The team would win 2 games against Baldwin and Hilo. That would set up another game just like the OIA championship game against Pearl City. It was the bottom of the 6th where it was tied 0-0 when Bronson would hit a double in the left center gap. Then came up Kamalu where he hit the first pitch he saw into the same spot and scoring Bronson from second. When Bronson scored the whole team would run out and jump in excitement. The crowd was going crazy and everyone thought that it was meant to be and they would win the game. But in the bottom of the inning the first batter got on base and then we got 2 outs in a row and the a double was then hit giving runners on 3rd and 2nd. Moanalua fans yelling for just one more out.Then came up Bronson's cousin and hit a ball up the middle scoring the 2 runners and Pearl City's fans yelling in approval. Then the bottom of the inning came and we got 3 straight outs and we just lost the game.
So through everything that happened that night is that even though at one moment you may feel on top of the world but the next could bring you right back down. But even though we lost we still know that our friend is still with us and protects us every game we play and always takes care of us. Also I learned that even though things may not go your way make the best of it and bounce back instead of sulking on it. This I believe. This i believe makes everyone enjoy everyday.
hi brayton! It's very touching reading about zach in your essay, knowing his story and what happened that night he passed. It's great to hear from a players view, someone who is actually on the team and experiences the emotions of the loss, probably more than any other group in school. I liked how you got very specific on the game. Although, your first paragraph doesn't seem to make much sense. for example you wrote "as people like to winning is everything". I think you ment to say "To some people, winning is everything". Just fix those mistakes and you should be good (:
ReplyDeleteHi Brayton! It was really nice to see the amount of emotional accounts that you had in this essay. Like what Tati said, i liked that you put in a lot of details, however, i think your essay would be stronger if you were able to make parts of essay present tense, that way you could incorporate more direct emotions. for example, instead of saying something like "Moanalua fans yelled" you could say "The fans screamed and chanted our name, waiting for us to pitch" or something like that :P
ReplyDelete-Leah
Hi Brayton,
ReplyDeleteI agree that the story of the MoHS baseball team is an emotional one. I think, however, that you need to be clearer on the point you are trying to make. If you are focusing on Zach and his inspiration to the team, the idea of "bouncing back" doesn't seem to fit...we don't normally think of "bouncing back" from someone's death.
But if you are referring to not sulking and bouncing back from defeat, then your details should concentrate on that and not on the previous season.
I also think that it would be stronger if you show your particular involvement with the team...right now it seems as if the experience of bouncing back is one you are watching, rather than participating in.
mrs s